My $0.02...
Overall...
-- it's a great track, and a solid mix.. has some moments of greatness, and is almost there. Good work! I'm just going to make suggestions on stuff to tweak. Don't take this feedback negatively...
The first minute...
-- lead vocal is too quiet
-- a couple times the singer's voice annoys me when he hits that really low note and holds it too long. Use an envelope or something to fade those sustained notes out earlier. I have the same problem with my voice when I get out of range, it's all-or-nothing.
-- there's a distracting hiss that rides the lead vocal... was it a noisy recording and thrown a heavy gate on it? Maybe try some noise reduction on that track instead of a simple gate.
-- claps are too loud... I love em, but drop em quite a bit.
The transition around 0:60...
-- the level when the whole band kicks in is a bit of a shock, but maybe that's by design... I find if I have the first bit at a comfortable volume, I want to turn down my headphones when it kicks in.
1:45 or so...
-- vocals are too quiet
2:18 or so..
-- the vocal "seems the worst times..." has to go up... way up. To my songwriter ears, that vocal is the payoff for the whole song. Is that line doubled panned hard left and right? I'm not much of a fan of doubling unless it's dead solid. I'd rather hear one voice there, for such an important theme. As is, I'm hearing the panned right vocal as reverb or something, and it's too affected for a theme so important to the tune.
Best,
-Garret